Free Your Mind, and the Rest Will Follow

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There was music playing, she could feel it, but her mind wasn’t ready to understand the words. She could just feel the beat, it pulsed in her head. She closed her eyes and just let it wash over her. She let everything wash over her. What now? What would she do? He’s gone, he’s not coming back, it’s over. 

She tried to see his face, that last time they were together, but the features wouldn’t come to her and she panicked. She took a deep breath and focussed on the music – something about hands in the lyrics… She thought about his hands, they were normal hands, nothing unusual about them. But when she saw them, she saw the fingers laced between hers, she saw his hand bringing her hand to his mouth. She felt his breath on her skin as he grazed his lips over her knuckles in a feathery kiss. 

The music changed, slowed, a lower pulsing beat and her memory responded. She saw those hands reaching out to touch her face and trace a line down her cheek, down her neck and down her side to encircle her waist and come to rest against her back, pulling her closer to him. In her mind, she followed his hands as they travelled down her body and as her head fell back, it came to her in a rush – she finally remembered his face.

She knew he was gone, but she knew she would always remember him.


I’ve signed up to Writing101. For this post, I’ve used the free-writing method and haven’t gone back to edit the text – eek! Paragraphs seemed to make themselves, so I hope it flows ok. The idea was to just write for 20 minutes, whatever came to you.

It’s strange, I find it so much easier to write like this, these words right here, when I’m writing about myself and what I think and personally believe. The story above – I wrote it in the “stream-of-consciousness” style, as the daily prompt requested, but it didn’t seem to come to me as easily. I had to pour myself a glass of wine, put on some music and sit down at my coffee table in order to get that to flow.

Anyway, this is the start of 20 days of prompts from the Writing101 team. I’ll try to include a photo each time, but probably won’t give my usual information about the shot. I hope you enjoy this slight sideways step from me, I want to improve my writing and you know I love a challenge 🙂

x desleyjane

 


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61 responses to “Free Your Mind, and the Rest Will Follow”

  1. blaqaffairs Avatar

    Welcome aboard! We could all use some improvements.

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      Yews, that’s true! Thank you for your welcome!

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  2. Norah Avatar

    I hope you enjoy writing 101. I look forward to popping in occasionally (I won’t promise every day) to see what you are up to.

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      Oh thanks Norah! I’ll see how I go …. 😉

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  3. alexdoesstuffsometimes Avatar

    Very nice free write, I really enjoy your style! Looking forward to seeing your take on the other 101 assignments!

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      Thank you Alex – looking forward to yours too! 🙂

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  4. guevaragem Avatar
    guevaragem

    I enjoyed this mini-scene! Keep at it!

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      Hello! Thank you!

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      1. guevaragem Avatar
        guevaragem

        It’s been so long.

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        1. desleyjane Avatar

          It has, I actually went looking for you the other day to make sure I was still following you. All good with you?

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          1. guevaragem Avatar
            guevaragem

            Did you, really? I appreciate it :). I’ve been fine, but college has been keeping me busy. But I do want to get back into the writing habit that I so shamefully neglected. How are things with you? I saw your photo of the moon and it was otherworldly.

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            1. desleyjane Avatar

              I did! I saw that your last post was in February (8th maybe from memory, but I could be wrong). I figured you must be busy but wasn’t sure if you had something going on. I’m so glad you’re back! Things are good here, busy, rainy, chocolatey 🙂
              Thank you – my poor old moon experience…

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              1. guevaragem Avatar
                guevaragem

                Ugh, rainy. It’s been rainy around here too. I’m starved for sunshine. And maybe you should consider taking more moon photos. Two reasons: 1) I love the moon and 2) you’re an amazing photographer.

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                1. desleyjane Avatar

                  Thankfully, the sun was out today and I did some gardening, maybe even got a little colour 🙂
                  Wow, thank you, that’s a lovely comment. I will definitely be attempting more moon shots in the future x.

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                  1. guevaragem Avatar
                    guevaragem

                    The last time I soaked in some sunshine was last August. Even my cat is looking a little pale. I know I’ve said this before, but have you thought about putting together a photography book? Or Photography 101 for people who’ve attempted it and failed?

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                    1. desleyjane Avatar

                      LOL, your poor cat!!! Come visit us in Australia 🙂
                      I haven’t thought about that actually, I love the idea. I’m starting a new feature about photo-editing with a fellow photo-blogger very soon! I’m quite excited for that to start 🙂

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                    2. guevaragem Avatar
                      guevaragem

                      New blog?

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                    3. desleyjane Avatar

                      No, I will post to mine and as a guest blogger on Lucile’s… It’s a monthly feature, fingers crossed people find it interesting 😛

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  5. afairymind Avatar

    Great piece of writing, Desley. It flows really well. 🙂 I look forward to reading more.

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      Thank you, that means a lot!

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  6. twenty7zero3 Avatar
    twenty7zero3

    This is lovely. I really got caught up in this. I found myself in the shoes of that woman and remembered my lost love in the process. Thank you for writing this 🙂

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      My pleasure. Thank YOU so much for such a lovely comment. I am humbled.

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  7. jillypopmusic Avatar

    Bittersweet, and I was there with you. What a great writing style. Left me wanting to know more about you and him.

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      Thank you! That does mean a lot to me x.

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  8. Faraday's Candle Avatar

    Your style has always been wonderful! Have fun with this!

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      Thank you! It’s nerve-wracking! But hopefully by the end of it, I won’t be shaking! 🙂

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      1. Faraday's Candle Avatar

        You will be better for it! Taking risk is part of our journey! Enjoy!!

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        1. desleyjane Avatar

          An excellent attitude! I agree 🙂 Have a great day.

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  9. Andy Townend Avatar

    Excellent! And I love the photo also..

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      Thanks Andy! The photo is from my Story Bridge shoot here in Brisbane.

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  10. Russell J. Fellows Avatar

    I think you did pretty well for stream-of-consciousness without editing. The story seemed to flow for you.

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      Thank you Russell, it was tricky getting started but it flowed out once those first words were out 🙂

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  11. A.B Mood Avatar

    That sense of longing in that scene, that yearning.. wow.. Made my heart skip a beat 🙂 Beautiful piece there my friend. I’m so glad I’ve run into your blog. Hope to read more amazing stuff from you soon ❤

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      Thank you so much! What a lovely comment. I’m excited to be starting this course x.

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      1. A.B Mood Avatar

        Yeah it’s only been the first day and I’ve got to meet such lovely people ^_^ This is gonna be awesome 😀

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        1. desleyjane Avatar

          Me too! I did photo101 last year and have stayed in touch with so many of those 101’ers. It’s a great community!

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          1. A.B Mood Avatar

            I hope through this 101 you’ll now be a part of my most beloved community members as well ^_^ xo

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            1. desleyjane Avatar

              Aw that’s lovely. Yes it feels like a lovely group here too. I’m honour we by your words. X

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  12. Amy Sampson Avatar

    I’m doing writing 101 too! I sat down half an hour ago to get started. I haven’t opened my dashboard yet. I got distracted. See you in the commons. 🙂

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      LOL – good luck and see you there!

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  13. inidna Avatar

    Wow, I really enjoyed reading that and I think you write very well! After going through a recent break up and having similar thoughts to what you just wrote, it really hit close to home. I look forward to reading more from you throughout the Writing 101 challenge 🙂

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      Oh thank you Inidna, I really appreciate that. I’ve just read yours as well and really enjoyed it. It’s going to be a fun month!

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      1. inidna Avatar

        I definitely think it’s going to be a fun month!

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  14. eclecticoddsnsods Avatar

    oooh la la, phew i need a cold shower now and love the bokeh!

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      Hahahahahaaaaaa, you’re so funny. Thanks Justine. X

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  15. luciledegodoy Avatar

    Hey DJ, I loved it. You described it so vividly that I could feel each little movement with anticipation. Wow. Looking forward to reading more in the next days, buddy!
    The photo is fabulous and gorgeous. Fresh…
    See you tomorrow. xxx

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      Thank you dearest, that’s so kind of you. I’m looking forward to this too! Xx

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      1. luciledegodoy Avatar

        You’re welcome hun. No kindness here, just honest critic. Shall we promise each other to do that throughout the course?? I already know how difficult is to know to get feedback during these courses. So let’s set a trend there and ask people to just say it…Dutch way! Lol
        ️Xxx

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        1. desleyjane Avatar

          Always honesty. I’m a bad liar anyway 😋
          Yes let’s not do the marketing version!!
          Xx

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          1. luciledegodoy Avatar

            Deal! ️Xxx
            All good there?

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            1. desleyjane Avatar

              All good here. Just thinking about dinner… But just checking in… 😊

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              1. luciledegodoy Avatar

                Enjoy dinner! I’m at a waiting room for mammography two year control.
                How boring! lol

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                1. desleyjane Avatar

                  Ugh very boring. But necessary, huh? Good luck!
                  Have you thought about today’s assignment?

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                  1. luciledegodoy Avatar

                    Yes indeed !
                    I left home early and haven’t seen it yet. I’m in the commons as long as I check from my computer but have no access from the mobile app.

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                    1. desleyjane Avatar

                      Oh well halfway there is a start!!

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  16. lisadorenfest Avatar

    Wow! That was very well done piece. You are a very talented writer!

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      Wow thanks Lisa! I need to work on seeing the big picture and making a complete story so hopefully this process will help me with that. Thank you again x.

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  17. Cardinal Guzman Avatar

    Nice bokeh shot.

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    1. desleyjane Avatar

      Cheers Cardinal. The lights of Story Bridge in Brisbane. ☺️

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