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There was music playing, she could feel it, but her mind wasn’t ready to understand the words. She could just feel the beat, it pulsed in her head. She closed her eyes and just let it wash over her. She let everything wash over her. What now? What would she do? He’s gone, he’s not coming back, it’s over. 

She tried to see his face, that last time they were together, but the features wouldn’t come to her and she panicked. She took a deep breath and focussed on the music – something about hands in the lyrics… She thought about his hands, they were normal hands, nothing unusual about them. But when she saw them, she saw the fingers laced between hers, she saw his hand bringing her hand to his mouth. She felt his breath on her skin as he grazed his lips over her knuckles in a feathery kiss. 

The music changed, slowed, a lower pulsing beat and her memory responded. She saw those hands reaching out to touch her face and trace a line down her cheek, down her neck and down her side to encircle her waist and come to rest against her back, pulling her closer to him. In her mind, she followed his hands as they travelled down her body and as her head fell back, it came to her in a rush – she finally remembered his face.

She knew he was gone, but she knew she would always remember him.


I’ve signed up to Writing101. For this post, I’ve used the free-writing method and haven’t gone back to edit the text – eek! Paragraphs seemed to make themselves, so I hope it flows ok. The idea was to just write for 20 minutes, whatever came to you.

It’s strange, I find it so much easier to write like this, these words right here, when I’m writing about myself and what I think and personally believe. The story above – I wrote it in the “stream-of-consciousness” style, as the daily prompt requested, but it didn’t seem to come to me as easily. I had to pour myself a glass of wine, put on some music and sit down at my coffee table in order to get that to flow.

Anyway, this is the start of 20 days of prompts from the Writing101 team. I’ll try to include a photo each time, but probably won’t give my usual information about the shot. I hope you enjoy this slight sideways step from me, I want to improve my writing and you know I love a challenge 🙂

x desleyjane

 

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Posted by:desleyjane

photographer, blogger, planner, scientist, dog lover, frequent flyer, daughter, sister, BFF, human

61 replies on “Free Your Mind, and the Rest Will Follow

          1. Did you, really? I appreciate it :). I’ve been fine, but college has been keeping me busy. But I do want to get back into the writing habit that I so shamefully neglected. How are things with you? I saw your photo of the moon and it was otherworldly.

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            1. I did! I saw that your last post was in February (8th maybe from memory, but I could be wrong). I figured you must be busy but wasn’t sure if you had something going on. I’m so glad you’re back! Things are good here, busy, rainy, chocolatey 🙂
              Thank you – my poor old moon experience…

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              1. Ugh, rainy. It’s been rainy around here too. I’m starved for sunshine. And maybe you should consider taking more moon photos. Two reasons: 1) I love the moon and 2) you’re an amazing photographer.

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                1. Thankfully, the sun was out today and I did some gardening, maybe even got a little colour 🙂
                  Wow, thank you, that’s a lovely comment. I will definitely be attempting more moon shots in the future x.

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                  1. The last time I soaked in some sunshine was last August. Even my cat is looking a little pale. I know I’ve said this before, but have you thought about putting together a photography book? Or Photography 101 for people who’ve attempted it and failed?

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                    1. LOL, your poor cat!!! Come visit us in Australia 🙂
                      I haven’t thought about that actually, I love the idea. I’m starting a new feature about photo-editing with a fellow photo-blogger very soon! I’m quite excited for that to start 🙂

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  1. This is lovely. I really got caught up in this. I found myself in the shoes of that woman and remembered my lost love in the process. Thank you for writing this 🙂

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  2. That sense of longing in that scene, that yearning.. wow.. Made my heart skip a beat 🙂 Beautiful piece there my friend. I’m so glad I’ve run into your blog. Hope to read more amazing stuff from you soon ❤

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  3. Wow, I really enjoyed reading that and I think you write very well! After going through a recent break up and having similar thoughts to what you just wrote, it really hit close to home. I look forward to reading more from you throughout the Writing 101 challenge 🙂

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  4. Hey DJ, I loved it. You described it so vividly that I could feel each little movement with anticipation. Wow. Looking forward to reading more in the next days, buddy!
    The photo is fabulous and gorgeous. Fresh…
    See you tomorrow. xxx

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      1. You’re welcome hun. No kindness here, just honest critic. Shall we promise each other to do that throughout the course?? I already know how difficult is to know to get feedback during these courses. So let’s set a trend there and ask people to just say it…Dutch way! Lol
        ️Xxx

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