Freestyling Edge

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She feels the sharp edge of darkness closing in
Flashes of red pulsing
almost rhythmically
Each one timed with a wave of pain.

Reaching out
she makes a whimpering sound
Too much too bear
It shouldn’t be this hard.

With crisp sound, foil breaks
The pills slide down
She slumps to the ground
Sweet. Chemical. Relief.


This is my submission to Justine’s Eclectic Corner #9 Edge – Photography, quotes and poetry! She asks to submit a photo, quote or a free verse poem, depicting EDGE. I’ve never really written free verse before, so I thought I’d try it. Justine explains Free Verse:

Free verse is an open form of poetry. It does not use consistent meter patterns, rhyme, or any other musical pattern. It thus tends to follow the rhythm of natural speech.

The photo is one that I’ve used before to accompany another piece of writing for Justine’s Eclectic Corner here. I think it suits this prompt as well.

x desleyjane

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16 Comments Add yours

  1. Andy Townend says:

    Excellent, I can feel the pain.

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    1. desleyjane says:

      Thanks Andy 🙂

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  2. Oh goodness that’s like you inadvertently wrote that for me lolol I know it so well! Brilliant and really out of the box. Love that photo remember it well and you did a superb free verse thank you 😀

    Fab to see you here at Eclectic Corner sweet Desleyjane x

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    1. desleyjane says:

      Oh thank you. I actually started thinking about this for one of Mara’s poetry prompts – Drowned. I think I had a very bad headache that evening. I didn’t get it done then so I thought “let’s take the edge off” for Justine x.

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      1. oh well I am glad you ended up saving it for mine, be it fate that lent a hand on that one 😀 x sorry about the headache, mind you, something good came of it? 😀

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        1. desleyjane says:

          Thanks, yep all’s well that ends well…?

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  3. Wow that’s dark. I like it though.

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    1. desleyjane says:

      Thanks jillyp 🙂

      Like

  4. Joanne says:

    Been there, done that – feel the pain then relief from here!

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  5. Very intense! Well-written and riveting!
    The photo goes along perfectly….

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    1. desleyjane says:

      Thank you Lia. Happy Weekend to you.

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  6. Oh wow! That’s brilliant. A new poet in town.

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    1. desleyjane says:

      Oh gosh. Thanks dear x.

      Like

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