Ended (Dark Side Thursday)

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For Andy Townend’s Dark Side Thursday.

Andy has provided an outlet for our dark sides. I wrote this a few weeks ago (on a plane, of course!) but I thought it was too dark to share. I haven’t ever written anything like it. I would usually put this summary at the bottom of my post but I’ve put it at the top this time just to warn you : it’s Dark Side Thursday.

x desleyjane

Ended.

I can’t hear anything but my own gasping breath and the pounding of my feet as they hit the wet asphalt. It’s late. I don’t know what time. But it’s dark and there’s nobody around. A misty rain is falling. It hampers my progress. I just need to get away from him. I shift position to run on my toes. The movement costs me precious time but I need to be able to hear him behind me. Where is he? I dare not risk a look for fear of tripping and then it will be all over. I can hear him. Far enough behind me thanks to the blow I landed on his side. Hopefully I’ve destroyed one of his kidneys.

There’s a corner ahead. I’m hoping there’s somewhere to hide although I’m loathe to stop moving after all this time. Two weeks. He’s had me trapped there for almost two weeks, tied up so tight my ankles are throbbing even now. My right arm is hanging low and screaming in pain. As I round the corner I risk a glance behind me. He is there. He is right there. Oh god, he is terrifying!Β 

I cry out in fright and lose my rhythm, scrambling to get away from him, tripping over some garbage on the street. Keep moving! Get up! Go! I regain my footing and lurch away across the street towards the glow of the one streetlight that is working. I can hear him moving behind me. He’s not even trying to be quiet. He knows there’s nobody here in this industrial estate. He’s done this before. He knows what he’s doing. I’m just playing mouse.

I shriek as suddenly I feel his fingers brush my shoulder. Once. Twice. And then his fingers dig into my already damaged flesh. He forces me to my knees and I’m trembling, gasping for breath, chest heaving. As he leans in close to me, the heat and stench of his breath in my face forces me to turn my head away from him. And that’s when I feel the sharp pressure against my throat. As the blade cuts into me, I scream. And he covers my mouth. I can feel my blood gushing from the wound as my vision fades and I slump to the cold wet ground.

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36 Comments Add yours

  1. Joanne says:

    Glad you gave the heads-up on the dark-side BEFORE your piece but WOW, my heart was thumping in my chest as if I was the one being chased. Fabulous writing!

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    1. desleyjane says:

      Wow thanks Joanne. I wasn’t sure but when I saw Andy’s prompt it just seemed like fate!

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      1. Joanne says:

        Fate indeed! πŸ™‚

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  2. OMG….Desley!!!!!! Faints haha…

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    1. desleyjane says:

      LOL.
      Fans her friend worriedly….

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  3. Mara Eastern says:

    Well… this is VERY dark!! I get it that it’s creative writing but I don’t think that anything in the world would make me write about my OWN murder! You rock the piece.

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    1. desleyjane says:

      Thanks Mara. Eek!

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  4. Amy Sampson says:

    Nice work! Thank heavens it’s fiction! I can tell already that I’m gonna love the contributions for Andy’s Dark Side Thursdays.

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    1. desleyjane says:

      Cheers Amy!! I’m looking forward to reading them all too.

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  5. Loretta says:

    Wow! You got me there, visions of darkness enveloped me as I read ……Nicely done!

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    1. desleyjane says:

      Thank you Loretta!!

      Like

  6. andy townend says:

    Oh God Desley! This is an incredible and very rapid response to the challenge, please do tell us you are in fact alive when the morning breaks in the South!!

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    1. desleyjane says:

      Here I am!! Slept like the proverbial dead. LOL. Thanks again!

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      1. andy townend says:

        The pleasure was mine!

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  7. Hello dearest, all good over there? Alive and kicking?
    I’m glad you warned me but even though you did, my heart jumped out of my body and I had to catch it on the floor. Oh my, I was running too, and trying to escape this monster. Maybe I cannot sleep tonight. LOL.
    But seriously, you have a knack for this. You know how to do it. Bravissima!

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    1. desleyjane says:

      Thanks luv. I’m alive and happy πŸ™‚
      I appreciate that. I was flying somewhere a while back and just started typing and this is what happened…. X

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  8. brittabottle says:

    Holy cow! This is amazing, DesleyJane, in the darkest creepiest way possible. I want more! πŸ™‚

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    1. desleyjane says:

      LOL holy cow I love it!! Thank you. So much.

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  9. DJ, this is great because I love reading or watching anything horror. You’re writing is wonderful and you could turn this into a short story. Riveting stuff.

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    1. desleyjane says:

      Oh I’m so glad you like it. It was a little daunting to hit the publish button on this one. But the feedback has been wonderful. Thanks SO much!!

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  10. Yikes, Desley!! So,well written! Love the flow, the rhythm of your sentences, the adjectives you use, the terror you transmit! Poor girl but yay for you! πŸ˜€

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    1. desleyjane says:

      Oh thank you so much for your comment Stacy. I’m touched 😘

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  11. nalinki says:

    dark and terrifyingly well written πŸ™‚

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  12. pommepal says:

    Truly scary and quite riveting, could not stop reading had to find out what happened and what a jolt the end was. You have a great way with words and suspense…

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    1. desleyjane says:

      Oh thank you PP!!

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  13. loisajay says:

    Holy crap!!! Catches her breath…..and reads it again. And I don’t even like scary things! Fantastic. Lord, this is gonna be a rough 51 more weeks.

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    1. desleyjane says:

      LOL. Sorry!! And thanks!! And yes I think you’re right!!

      Like

  14. loricarlson66 says:

    Wow! this is great stuff…. love the suspense built in with every step!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. desleyjane says:

      Thanks again. I think this one is my favourite.

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      1. loricarlson66 says:

        Welcome πŸ™‚ it really is a good one

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